--Shorttiee
--Shorttiee
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Heyy everyone.
I just started writtin songs.
I know i got a ways before i get extremely good. but im a beginner soo give me some slack. I rap on my own. I haven't tried rappin with sumone else. i might try that later on down the road.
tell me what yea think . i just want peoples opinons on my music.
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Yuck... whats up with that beat that sounds like a sick moth flippin around a hot light every 5 seconds? :PReal poetik ... I like the laid back flow, that worx 4 u! Not too krazy about ur entrance tho as far as jumpin in the beat goes ... but I think ur nice, I'm impressed.Shortiiee this song has potential and so do u!!! I like the whisperin in tha beginin, plus I can hear/feel ur pain thru tha lyrics and thatz real. Word u did pretty good writin this song, u even threw a bridge in there, thaswussup. The beatz kool too.
I think this song is very good for wat itz worth at the time, considerin the fact that this was more about a healthy release to u than an attempt to broadcast ur talent. I suggest u keep at this one and get it solid(5-star), ud be surprised how many people would like it.
Touch up ur lyrics a little, focus on ur delivery(pronunciation and clarity) and flow(syllables and word patterns/words per bar), u already got emotion pourin out so u good on that, also try dubbin ur lyrics, maybe toss in adlibs 2. If u take this serious and work at rap u could really make rap work 4 u...believe that!!! Good luck, holla at me wen u put new trax up aite.listening to your songs you sound very depressed
and your pics look depressed hey its gonna be alright
yer young you got al the time in the world work on your image and your craft if youre serious about this which you obviously are, perk it up the world is depressed enough
music is suppose to heal things let it heal you and it will be alright the dude aint worth the pain ya know get hold of lil saintsta shes got something you need to hear right now. go listen it will perk you up--jamie gimme a shout sometime i will help if i can, remember jesus is your hero
not nobody else died for ya on a cross. and nobody else would.All comments (23)
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Alice
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Yo dat was hot let me know if u wanna collab keep doing ur thang