Ben Verow
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2
rossmaute
Sep 29, 2004
howdy, man. i hope youre ready for some constructive criticism. youve got some good ideas and talent so hopefully this will help. really, im just hear to help.
slippin away: its a good idea but you need to expound on it. maybe take out a few 'slippin away's and add some more verses. theres certainly more things you can say about how society isnt as nice that doesnt have to do with getting mugged. i like the numerous 'ohs', though.
coffeeshop: i like as is.
happy birthday: i like that, too.
GW entry: the basic rhythm and melody is good. maybe you could add some length to it and stick some words on there. or not. its good as is, but you could make a song proper from it, too. its your call.
eruption: fun, but hearing it once is enough.
happy b-day rabid: i think if you could add this "track" to your other b-day song, it would add some depth. but this alone......uh, yeah.
18 angry goths: get rid of the intro and this song gets 100x better. seriously impressed here.
Cool sounds! Keep it up. Did you get the idea for the bunny suit from "Donnie Darko"? It's a great movie.