--Shorttiee
Comments
23
Kevin Wayne
Feb 18, 2011
Song: INTRO--!
Yuck... whats up with that beat that sounds like a sick moth flippin around a hot light every 5 seconds? :P
SpideR-style
Jan 22, 2010
Real poetik ... I like the laid back flow, that worx 4 u! Not too krazy about ur entrance tho as far as jumpin in the beat goes ... but I think ur nice, I'm impressed.
SpideR-style
Jan 22, 2010
Shortiiee this song has potential and so do u!!! I like the whisperin in tha beginin, plus I can hear/feel ur pain thru tha lyrics and thatz real. Word u did pretty good writin this song, u even threw a bridge in there, thaswussup. The beatz kool too.
I think this song is very good for wat itz worth at the time, considerin the fact that this was more about a healthy release to u than an attempt to broadcast ur talent. I suggest u keep at this one and get it solid(5-star), ud be surprised how many people would like it.
Touch up ur lyrics a little, focus on ur delivery(pronunciation and clarity) and flow(syllables and word patterns/words per bar), u already got emotion pourin out so u good on that, also try dubbin ur lyrics, maybe toss in adlibs 2. If u take this serious and work at rap u could really make rap work 4 u...believe that!!! Good luck, holla at me wen u put new trax up aite.
JAMIE GAZELLE (US)
Nov 24, 2008
listening to your songs you sound very depressed
and your pics look depressed hey its gonna be alright
yer young you got al the time in the world work on your image and your craft if youre serious about this which you obviously are, perk it up the world is depressed enough
music is suppose to heal things let it heal you and it will be alright the dude aint worth the pain ya know get hold of lil saintsta shes got something you need to hear right now. go listen it will perk you up--jamie gimme a shout sometime i will help if i can, remember jesus is your hero
not nobody else died for ya on a cross. and nobody else would.
emmamess
May 23, 2008
i listened to your re-done track - better - what r ya usin to mix your vocals -n- music? it sounds like your spittin to tha beat - in tha room with ya - download audasity for - free. ya can get a separate vocal -n- music track this way. i'm still learnin how to use it though - so i ain't a mix master yet -n- i got a cheap 17$ mic from walmart - lol! ya workin it with what ya got -n- ya gots alotta heart. Try that audacity though - i think it would help ya mix your sound better. if ya get audacity - let me kno -n- i'll tell ya how to convert tha track to an mp3 - so you can post em on soundclick.
emmamess
May 07, 2008
alright girl spit that shyt - now ya spittin - just wish ya track waz clearer - can't hear vocals too well - but i kno you was FEELIN IT when ya spit it! I rated tha vocals -n- lyrics 3 cuz of tha quality of tha recording - not tha content!
Blaze N' Colabs
Mar 28, 2008
you need to put more energy into get louder up your beats mabey add an effect on your voice if you feel it neccessary but keep it up if you put heart into it you'll shine
im new to dis sh*** to an think im kinda gettin better i dunno tell me what cha think
and if you ever wanna collab im down
Daniel Liliu
Mar 08, 2008
Aye Wuddup Widdit... I Peeped Some Of Your Songz... The Suggestions I Got For Is... Bond With Your Music... The Beat N Your Lyrics Should Be One... When You Spit Your Lyrics... Should Be Feelin Like Your Makin Love To It... No Joke... N It Seems Like Your Hesitant On What Your Saying... Your The Author Of Your Music... If The Listener Feels You Aren't Dedicating Your Whole Mind Body N Soul To Your Music Then The Listener Wont Either... Dedicate Yourself... When You Spit... Do It To Where You Feel You Are The Best In The World... With That Being Said... Just Do It To Your Best Capability... As Time Goes On... You'll Become Better Without You Even Knowing... K Then God Bless... ps... Keep Peepin My Page... You'll Feel My Trak... Trust Me On This One... God Bless
S*O*
emmamess
Feb 28, 2008
Song: Last Chance
feelin this - let out tha emotions - your a good song writer! i'm old enough to be your mom - i have sons 14 and 11 - hope i don't make them feel like this!
emmamess
Feb 28, 2008
Song: It's your Choice *NEW*
good melody and lyrics - ya just need to get more confident when ya spit.
emmamess
Feb 21, 2008
Song: Lost &, confused
practice gettin loud - then when ya wanna freestle it'll get more smooth when ya spit quiet! ya spit what ya feel though - thats tha best way 2 start!
JackPot
Feb 19, 2008
yeah, the sound qualiy is a lot better. your definatly improving! just put a lot more meaning into the way you flow.
but yeah keep it up gurl! xx
Markuz Ocampo
Feb 19, 2008
New track up called "i Resign" ...Tell me what U think of it. Aight I'm out!
Kosmik Rayne
Feb 05, 2008
Song: Lost &, confused
you got potential girl..... the only thing is put some heart and soul into it while ur flowin! lyrics are awesome! music is awesome just missin the feelin......u will get there tho! keep ya head up!
the only thing i would recommend is go get urself a condenser mic.
when u got time check out "when the heart stops" and "point blank" they r both instrumentals. let me knw if you like'em!
We Aint Right Record'z
Jan 23, 2008
Song: Lost &, confused
Hellz Yeah, Hellz Yeah!!!!!!! Keep Doin Your Thang, Fo-Sho!!!!!!!
Starinmycar
Jun 17, 2007
Rule number one
Never have any doubts about you music.....
Dont let no one get you down...
Keep doing what you FEEL.....
You will always get better and better...
You do have the feelin...or else you would not have started your music***smile***
Starinmycar
Starinmycar
Jun 17, 2007
Go to your page design on your profile..
get your songs playin on your profile page
I'll help you build your music page so you can get some exposure.....
I added you and voted hot
Yo dat was hot let me know if u wanna collab keep doing ur thang