This is not a bad song, but it needs work. A simple demo with out to many effects is better than a production that is poor. Over all you are right it has promise. Re-work your lyrics to smooth out the rough spots, Its OK to change lyrics to make a melody work and vis a vis. don't take my criticism as harsh....Its really the best advise I can give to someone who has potential. Reminds me of America.
This is not a bad song, but it needs work. A simple demo with out to many effects is better than a production that is poor. Over all you are right it has promise. Re-work your lyrics to smooth out the rough spots, Its OK to change lyrics to make a melody work and vis a vis. don't take my criticism as harsh....Its really the best advise I can give to someone who has potential. Reminds me of America.