Damn... You are like my favorite soundclick emcee, (no offense to others)...
I'm bangin this shit... The verses are really on point, its like you keep gunnin on the shit...

Damn man the lyrics are sick! I got a special place in my heart for antiestablishment rap. but.....
you lost so much meaning thru yo delivery. I feel the whole Hiero influence, (u from oakland?) but when you use that del/souls extended line technique you gotta be on point for the following line. you seem to lose your bearings

ex:"administration...admiration" line is off. add a lil filler like "than he brings admiration"
did you write this to a faster beat?
take your time and let the beat carry you don't rush it.
sometimes it may sound like you are being to ridgid but the crispness will smooth out naturally. we naturally have rhythm so structure is more important to us. vice versa for whites.

Man I really like that you have some humor in your stuff, it really reaches a wider audience. You have some serious content with out being preachy about it.

My Religion:
Nice mellow tune and I love the concept of basing it on a relationship with Mary Jane. Some of the lines “still with her” and from the chorus “I can’t let her go. I admit it I’m more sprung then” ? Was it sea paint? I couldn’t get that part. The bit about coming of age, the honeymoon being over and hitting the bride, great twist of words. I Like the underlying duel meanings on many of the lyrics. It has a hateful love theme going on, depending on which side you choose.

At 1:28 a really liked that, it sounded like a symbol crash. It was actually slightly startling, and added a hint of menace to the backdrop which up to then was soooo mellow and safe. Everyone is chilling out all cozy and comfortable, then that little pang of paranoia. Really smooth, I like the lyrics nothing sounds forced and it all seems to fit in nicely. I liked the cut back to what you had in the beginning, on this one it was a fitting conclusion. A lot of thought went into it the lyrics not to mention the performance sounded really clean. It had a good mellow beat and nothing distracts from the vocals. Yeah ok, I really like it. I’m trying to be critical, but couldn’t find anything I would consider wrong or out of place here.

Temporary bad dream is genious!!!!! I love the beat!! (is the melody inspired by the Gargoyles theme music?)
15 out of 15

It's not often that I get into a Rap or Hip-Hop track, because I usually find the lack of ideas a little stereotyped, and (usually) in hip-hop I don't hear anything new in terms of production.

This track has way more creativity than I expected. Firstly because of its religious/moral overtones within the lyrics (classic good versus evil), and the brilliant backing vocal choral sound, sophisticated harmonic texures, and the really strong variations to the underlying beat.

The production values are strong, and basically, I can't fault the composition, or the lyrics, or the delivery, or the engineering, or the quality of the performance, or the backing track construction.

I was knocked out by this track, and coming from someone who isn't really from a culture where Hip-hop is common, that's the highest praise I can offer.

Well worth a listen. Immaculate.

what the f***? ay yo how come we never collabed on nothing before? damn this shit is fucking hot !!

this beat is straight crack did u jack it from jedi? lol stoupes the shit but man everyone bump this shit good beat good lyrics good delivery good flow i like it

u remind of kool kieth in a way u got that stream-of-consciousness type a style

Suspeckt’s new song, [b]“The Second Coming,” [/b]is potentially a masterpiece. Already sitting on top of the Soundclick Alternative Hip Hop charts, “The Second Coming” is a [i]breath of fresh air to the Soundclick community[/i]. The new piece emotionally captures its listeners and forces them to enter a world beyond reality. Its brilliant lyrics and enchanting production, “The Second Coming,” is [i]work of art that is more than worthy of album distribution[/i]. [b][i]With studio-quality vocal production[/i][/b], “The Second Coming” could possibly be a #1 hit on America’s Indie Charts.

First of all I would just like to say in a non kissing ass way that The Second Coming is one of the more impressive songs in the alternative hip hop category. The beat is supported by profound lyrics that prooves.... lyric wrighting skills are talented in many ways. ....what makes me like the second coming so much is that i feel its the best song that fits your vocal style. listening ~ i went ahead and checked out more songs on your artist page: .......... All in all i would say the tracks are impressive and i would like to see more songs done from you in the style of The Second Coming... truely impressive man, keep up the good work.. Also would like your permission if i could use The Second Coming track the next time iam djing hip hop music on my set..         

Alright man, Take it easy..looking forward for your responce ////and more tracks from you.

(Stop sleepin on me)

[quote="pointblanc"]hot shit du, this is on some next shit....keep makin joints like this. It ain't really my cup of tea but I can recognize the heat....lyrical as f***, deep too. :)[/quote]