The mix leaves something to be desired, however. The chorus "take a little bit" section is way over driven. You are probably just overdriving the recorder or some peice of your sound gear and it really gets in the way of the song itself. If you have not listened to it on line, do so and I think you will see what I mean. I suggest backing off the mic so the quiet sections of the vocal meet up with louder sections. Watch those meter levels and don't push into the red zone. Once you've accomplished distortion from too much gain on a recording level - you can't take it back. It's a start over deal.

Best of luck and keep working - you have some talent.